The Storm Dragon’s Heart

August 22nd, 2010 Comments Off

Over the last few months, I’ve pri­mar­ily been work­ing on an expan­sion and sig­nif­i­cant revi­sion of The Storm Dragon’s Heart, a YA novel I wrote back in 2005. (Has it been that long?!) My test read­ers called it “Johnny Quest in fan­tasy Asia.”

I’m very excited by the result, and I’m sure I’ll be telling you much more about it in the near future.

Many were the changes I made to the book:

  • Expanded the nar­ra­tive by 13,000 words.
  • Added a new sub­plot and character!
  • Changed the main character’s back­ground and abilities.
  • Altered how magic works to bring it in line with the newer mate­r­ial that I’ve writ­ten in the same world.
  • Replaced Japan­ese and Chi­nese terms with Eng­lish equiv­a­lents. The set­ting is a fan­tasy ver­sion of a num­ber of East Asian cul­tures smashed together. It is not Japan with magic. This unex­pect­edly caused some prob­lems for some pre­vi­ous readers.
  • I dras­ti­cally sim­pli­fied the set­ting, thereby reduc­ing the bur­den of expo­si­tion. Some com­plete alter­ations, but in many cases I sim­pli­fied unnec­es­sar­ily com­plex aspects and replaced their fan­tasy names with stan­dard Eng­lish equiv­a­lents. Fan­tasy aspects that did not con­tribute to the plot or char­ac­ters or that did not add sig­nif­i­cant atmos­phere were neutered.
  • The orig­i­nal text had 500-word trav­el­ogues between longish chap­ters. These trav­el­ogues were inter­est­ing and helped with the bur­den of the more com­plex set­ting. They were now obso­lete, and frankly, they really threw off the pac­ing. Even though I cut 16 of these, the book grew by 5,000 words.
  • Shorter chap­ters of much more var­ied lengths. Stronger chap­ter hooks.
  • And, of course, gen­eral improve­ments in the qual­ity of the writ­ing and in storytelling.

So what, you may ask, is in the works for this one? A pod­cast? I hope so. Sam­ple chap­ters soon? Almost cer­tainly. Oth­er­wise, I can’t say for cer­tain yet. But stay tuned.

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